Revenge Tragedy

He is a little taster of the film script I’ve been working on for the last few months, a revenge tragedy that I have been itching to write for years.
Please be aware that this is not particularly pleasant and there will be swearing, and yes the c word is used.
I won’t be putting anymore on my blog as it gets nastier and swearier and I’d have to hit the adult content button but I think with this I can just about get away with it.
Would love to hear any comments or thoughts on this, which is the opening scene of the film.

“BLACK SCREEN

Man (voice over)
I never wanted kids. In fact I hated them, they made my skin fucking crawl. All that crying and whining drove me mad, I hated being trapped on a train with them. Couldn’t understand why their parents would do that. (pause) Then my wife got pregnant.

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A close up of a monitor showing a scan of a baby in the womb. A mouse cursor is tracing the outline of the head and body. A nurse (off screen) is telling us that this is a head and a body.

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A close up of the man’s face, watching the screen, his face lit from the image he is watching. His eyes are welling up with tears as he gazes at his son/daughter for the first time. He is Daddy. A woman’s voice (Mummy) is heard

Mummy (o.s.)
You okay?

Daddy
Yeah I’m fine (wipes eye)

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Maternity ward, a birthing suite. Mummy is on the bed, legs in stirrups, two midwives are between her legs as Daddy holds her hand. She is drenched in sweat as she is giving birth, pushing with all her might, screaming

Daddy
Come on baby another push, come on you’re so close now, you’re so close

Daddy (v.o.)
As soon as he was born you start to worry

The baby is born and there is much crying. Daddy drops back into a chair staring at his son, covered in blood on his wife’s chest. He bursts into tears, deep wracking tears which he can not stop.

He stands up and reaches his hand out, touching the baby for the first time

Daddy
Hello son, I’m your Daddy

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Daddy.
He’s sitting on a chair somewhere, we can’t see it properly yet. He looks different to the last scene. His face isn’t as plump, he’s thinner, his cheeks sunken, the bags under his eyes are HUGE and he’s smoking.

Daddy
Every waking moment at the back of your mind you worry. Will he catch anything? What if he dies in his cot? What if he stops breathing? What do I do if? (pause, drag on the smoke) Silly things, things you really don’t need to worry about. (pause) But you worry all the same (forces a smile).

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Daddy and Mummy walking the son in a pram in the park. It is a beautifully sunny day. This is at another time. Daddy’s face is back to plump and happy. No bags under the eyes. We are obviously flitting between the past and the present. His voice continues over what we see.

Daddy (v.o.)
I think about every moment now. The walks in the park

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Daddy feeding his son with a bottle

Daddy (v.o.)
Feeding him

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Mummy changing son’s nappy while Daddy helps

Daddy (v.o.)
Every nappy change

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Son rolling over for the first time. An ecstatic Mum and Dad clap and cheer

Daddy (v.o.)
I remember all the firsts as well. The first time he rolled over…

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Son taking his first tentative steps

Daddy (v.o)
…the first time he walked….

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Daddy and Son in the park alone, kicking a football back and forth between them

Daddy (v.o.)
…. Playing footba….(his voice breaks)

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A morgue. Daddy is standing over a slab. Tears are pouring down his face.

Daddy (v.o.)
And you took him

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Daddy.
Now, all thin and angry, his eyes with flames behind them

Daddy
You and those mother fuckers you call friends took my boy. (pause) Everything he was and everything he was going to be, you just fucking destroyed. (pause) I see him now. All the time. Even when I close my eyes he’s there.

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Black screen. Then a young six year old boy’s face comes into the shot and looks at the camera. Just as he starts to smile we…

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Daddy.

Daddy
Especially when I close my eyes. (pause) Your mate, the dopy looking cunt, Dick I think his name was. He told me your part.

We hear some muffled yells off camera

Daddy
He told me everything after I’d cut his feet off.

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Daddy stands up. He is in a room, a living room. There are two people tied and gagged to chairs in front of him, a man and a woman. To one side there are two teenagers, girls, hanging from the ceiling, upside down. Their throats cut and blood slowly drip, drip, dripping from the giant slashes. They have been dead for a little while. Daddy is in some overalls, he stubs the cigarette out and pockets the butt. He pulls on some plastic gloves and picks up a knife. He looks at the man.

Daddy
I’m going to skin your wife first.

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Cat Stevens’ song ‘Father and Son’ plays over the beginning credits.

While the beginning credits run we will see lots of ‘home movie’ style scenes of a young boy. Rolling over on the floor, eating his food and getting it all over his face, playing with some toys, crawling for the first time, his first steps, playing football, in a swimming pool, being taught how to dive etc…At one point in the footage the boy is given some crayons and paper. The boy, son, starts to scribble and draw.
The camera pans up and over him to see what he is drawing.
Looking down we see that he is drawing a picture of a man, then a woman and a little boy. They are all holding hands.
Above the picture of the man the son writes the word which is the title to our film

DADDY

We focus in on that as the song and opening credits come to an end and we fade to black.”